• UnderpantsWeevil@lemmy.world
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    8 hours ago

    Police engaged in a highly kinetic confrontation between the barrel of their service revolver and the aggressively kneeling and loudly pleading agitated individuals. Officers grew alarmed at the loud pleading sounds and fired eight to forty seven warning shots in the vicinity of the noise. Following a tactical survey of the area, they discovered a number of dead bodies which may have been involved in a firearms-based confrontation. Officers reported the situation to their immediate superiors and continued to patrol the area in search of enemy combatants and distressed civilians in order to provide emergency services.

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      5 hours ago

      Almost perfect, just needs more passive voice. “Police engaged” sounds like they might even be the cause of the death.